My Poem Rate It Please And Tell Me What You Think

~Dream~
I Feel Like I'm Living In Dream Time
Printed In Someone Else's Eyes
Of Her Sweet Laughter
Running Laps Around The Shape Or Your Lips And Eyelids

But If I Reach Up Toward His Burnt Cheeks To Kiss
You're So Much Fun To Be Around
Coming To A Lovely Halt
Your Smiling Face
And Laughed All Night

Oh How I Love It In The Car When We're All Having Fun
Given Everything
It Would Kill Me To Take Those Secrets Out
I Can't Help But Think
Now, We Are Nothing More Than Whispers And Dust
Of A Clear Night Sky
Don't Leave Me, Sweet Moon.